Feedback on my poem please?


1 shorter compared ones write,
wondering critique on it.

mind woven pot hole dying fall in
said dance house
beckon walls
spoke accent , ascended broken vows
i’m afraid see edges

miss people did not love
love-
love more loved
forever trying put taste

name thousand chewed frozen petals,
settle weeds- seed better
hide beneath our nails, they've become pressed
nailed these beads neck- believe , said

superglue clothes unto skin
skin knee-shed shades
doesn't fit right, don’t feel did
layer them thin , let them
lungs guilty filling, forgive me

this 1 shorter compared ones write, wondering critique on it. mind woven pot hole dying fall in said dance house beckon walls spoke accent , ascended broken vows i’m afraid see edges we...


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