Please read my poem!!! It's called Lost Victory! Please!?

hi, i'm 13 yrs old , writing weird poetry. i'm making go along. sorry if there spelling mistakes, phone hates me.

"lost victory"

have left
golden trophies stained dust
tattered silk wear
, crown dented rust

in raging hailstorm of lost gems
pitter patter, stand alone
breaking glass-statues of hearts
scratching dented stone

heave treasures mountainside
stare bright red eye
until colors melt pink , purple
, colors die

it's time nights rest
close eyes, spread gown
forget few moments
leave mark on ground

until blinding eye wakes me again
, feel myswlf rising rising
because cycle never ends
painful, hypnotizing

detailed feedback please! thanx :}}

hi, i'm 13 yrs old , writing weird poetry. i'm making go along. sorry if there spelling mistakes, phone hates me. "lost victory" have left golden trophies stained dust tattered silk wear , crown dented rust in a...

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