Feedback on my poem please?

format needs work, hoping hear opinion on poem, , maybe title suggestions- i've never been

we’re we’ve ever been
been quiet lately
contemplating places in somewhere’s
want everywhere not
2 days ago in love
2 days ago sun got more glances us- still
know because we’ve counted
know because i've seen-
way @
it's not way @ me

nothing after hello
day had been dandy
ok
iron every creased lovers grin, summer rain wrinkled pain
eyelashes, fall unto tongue
taste them
stages of chiseling away, way
quite pass time
hymn, home-made, store-bought iodine
align houses-call them homes
sign consent forms
if sink
not revive

if wake judgment not know who
me-
if walk landfills
tally ties every time no cigarette-
stronger mother, still love father?
hope flowers fall heavy heaven
press statues statues, statues
if swallow enough helium we'll fly away

think we've become crocheted former outlines of key chains
closest thing nothing
on bourbon street, smelled of alcohol
there’s no love in city
no love in town
have break two, break one- you

the format needs work, hoping hear opinion on poem, , maybe title suggestions- i've never been we’re we’ve ever been been quiet lately contemplating places in somewhere’s want everywhere not 2 days ago in...

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