Will you comment on the poem I wrote that was inspired by the Pickles comic?

snippet of poem great form poetic wit think growing stronger in niche. hard write complete paradigm shift in such short vers 1 functional.
@ cheesy had bad things threatening lips male authority figure not dad. might have been psychologically replacing mom's dad in unconscious, why had take on mothering of her. wish grow have little parent-dimmed switch.

i'm freaking losing it's okay, on doe's post. not let them rake me spoingy room formal fun jacket escape houdini ganme!

the fire hot
sips
@ potato bisque
serious.
cracker crumb clings
jut of bottom lip
if mocks
inability accept
human legacy.

no longer getting old
is.

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