Please comment and correct the beginning of my poem?


there child , lay,
below stars, under glass
quietly sleeping day,
alive patience lasts;
yet none should come
dreams forever cast.

wind , world side side,
below heavens high;
although seek not faith
hope kept in lies;
locked in our done sin
unfound forgiven friend.

there child , lay, below stars, under glass quietly sleeping day, alive patience lasts; yet none should come dreams forever cast. wind , world side side, below heavens high; although seek not faith hope kept in lies; locked in our done...


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