Angsty Teen Poetry Contest (for me anyways...)?


school literary magazine having angsty teen poetry contest. in order win prize, i'll need feedback on angstiness , cheesiness of poem.

@ last, you've come
oh ferryman.
anticipated arrival
arched on porcelain bowl
reeking acrid
rejected nourishment.
take bitter gold
, me
towards tumulus
on ground
, cold setting sun.
place me among lilies
below tinkling stars
of diamonds
, let past
dissolve.

my school literary magazine having angsty teen poetry contest. in order win prize, i'll need feedback on angstiness , cheesiness of poem. @ last, you've come oh ferryman. anticipated arrival arched on porcelain bowl reeking acrid rejected...


Arts & Humanities Poetry Next



Comments

Post a Comment

Popular posts from this blog

Reflections on a dream, would you kindly c/c?

snow in march in sleep found childhood friend @ play in northridge park. cheeks stained fallen tears, bobbed hair sleek , dark. snow slow melt march, our breath condensed in air , recall clarity while on lower stair, neighbour called pass on news, jeannie's mum dead. overheard whispered tones, should have been in bed. oh jeannie after time, face still wet grief. have pleased me more if had found relief. if had captured in eyes laughter once shared, wouldn't feel life had been impaired. snow in march in sleep found childhood friend @ play in northridge park. cheeks stained fallen tears, bobbed hair sleek , dark. snow slow melt march, our breath condensed in air , recall clarity while on lower stair, neighbour called pass on... Arts & Humanities Poetry Next
Read more

How did they get the Skytrain to go underneath False Creek?

canadians have been blasting through mountains , going on or under waterways centuries - george massey tunnel under fraser river being local example. [during ww2 there sorts of tunnels built going under downtown connecting factories waterfront] believe construction on dunsmuir tunnel ("skytrain tunnel") began in 1931? http://www.vancouverhistory.ca/archives_... dunsmuir tunnel http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/dunsmuir_tu... the new skytrain line goes yaletown, under false creek , airport, how have been built underneath false creek? Travel Canada Vancouver Next
Read more

Where would "rattlesnake country" be?

rattlesnakes group of venomous snakes of genera crotalus , sistrurus[1] of subfamily crotalinae ("pit vipers"). there 32 known species of rattlesnake, between 65-70 subspecies,[2] native americas, ranging southern alberta , southern british columbia in canada central argentina. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/rattlesnake fyi, when rattlesnake bites human injects poison 1 time in ten. according park rangers, on 90% of reported bites happen while tourists harassing snake. i hear people use phrase "this rattlesnake country". i'm not sure is. reason thought ozark mountains, saw on tv , in hollywood hill. know? Science & Mathematics Geography Next
Read more