I am 17, and i wrote this poem :) please tell me what you think ?


poem wrote :) called "daddy"

daddy nice man @ boor ?
daddy mean mum gone ?
daddy whats wrong ? why not talking ?

daddy why eyes watering ?
daddy whats going on ?
daddy angry @ me , did wrong ?

stranger @ door whats going on ?
why did make daddy cry angry @ daddy ?
stranger why crying did wrong ?

stranger mean mum gone
stranger mummy ? supposed home not long ago
stranger taking me ? seeing mummy ?

daddy stranger going ?
daddy still angry @ me ? please don't tell mummy ?
daddy mum meet here ?

stranger why getting down on 1 knee ?
stranger why crying @ me ?
stranger mean mum has died ?

this poem wrote :) called "daddy" daddy nice man @ boor ? daddy mean mum gone ? daddy whats wrong ? why not talking ? daddy why eyes watering ? daddy whats going on ? daddy angry @ me , did wrong ? stranger...


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