Is my poetry any good?


think skull contains ocean:

blue waves crash forever
rapid against heart
provided me yet tore life apart

seaweed embedded
dancing in swell
reminding me never

sun , storm
weather of mind
sparks of electricity washed tide

sharks appear @ midnight,
blocking out sun,
feed upon light reflects until i'm left none

ocean can't silenced
1 internal shout
, if tilt far 1 side
sea comes rushing out

haven't decided on introductory stansa or title yet hope it's pretty self-explanatory. first stansa life in general , how life provides need , yet can make miserable. embedded seaweed metaphor mentally-scarring events stay rest of life, stansa sun , storm emotions, sharks arriving metaphor disturbing or frightening thoughts think when can't sleep @ night, , final stansa when open how feeling floods out. know pretty deep, i'm not depressed or meaningful poetry, compliments or constructive critisicm

sometimes think skull contains ocean: blue waves crash forever rapid against heart provided me yet tore life apart seaweed embedded dancing in swell reminding me never sun , storm weather of the...


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